This is how the two first meet and I like the scene, I hope you all like it too:
Chapter
1
Liliana
The smells are the first things that hit
me. Huddling into myself, knees tucked under my chin as the hospital doors
whisk open and shut a sick sort of feeling sinks its claws into my stomach. I’m
ill. Have been for days.
Throwing up, always nauseous, and my
boobs hurt.
Biting my lower lip I glance at my
father sitting beside me. Angry doesn’t even begin to describe how he’s feeling.
The school called, said their daughter was puking her guts out. He’d seen me
puking my guts out the last ten days. Every time he’d give me a look that said,
“girl, that better not be what I think it is.”
I close my eyes as the ache in the back
of my skull intensifies.
The smells in here are awful-- blood,
sweat, and vomit. Beside me a little kid is hacking her lungs out. I’m not a
germaphobe, but each time I get blasted with the spray I tuck further into
myself and count to five before taking another breath.
Surrounded by people, but I’ve never
felt so alone.
I wish mom was here with me. She would hug
me, tell me it will be okay. But she hasn’t been feeling good the last year.
Doctors say she’s in the beginning
stages of multiple scoliosis, which means dad had to come.
The doors slide open with a loud whoosh.
Huffing the bangs out of my eyes I look up and my heart stills.
In fact, everything seems to freeze. It’s
a strange sensation, sounds grow dim, and the world recedes to a pinprick of
light, a halo that surrounds him. I
have no idea who he is, a perfect stranger in a room full of them, but
something about him stands out and makes me notice.
He has dark wavy hair and intense blue
eyes. He stands squinting in the doorway and it’s obvious why he’s here. The
entire left side of his face is a swollen mass of discolored skin. Grabbing
onto the corner of his jaw, I notice his knuckles are also split open. Hard
eyes scan the waiting room, and for a second, I glimpse in his face the same
emotion I’m feeling right now.
Anywhere
but here…
Then our eyes meet. He’s older than me,
I can tell. There are whiskers on his cheeks, and he doesn’t look like a boy.
Especially not like the boy who did this
to me.
The look lasts only a second, but feels
more like an eternity-- a stolen moment in time that exists outside of where we’re
at right now. But like so much in my life, it’s fleeting.
He sits far in the back of the room.
I want to turn and look. To see if I’d
been right and he’d understood-- if somehow a stranger understood exactly what I was going through.
But I can’t, because then a nurse comes
out and calls my name.
“Liliana Delgado?” Her voice is calm,
cool, and it sends chills straight through me. Wrapping the ends of my thick
sleeves around my closed fists I sit like a deer in the headlights, spooked out
of my mind with a mouth tasting like cotton.
“Get up,” my father growls low, for my
ears only.
Coming here, it’s just a formality. We
all know, but it’s one of those things that you can ignore until you no longer
can.
Swallowing hard, I look back at the guy
one last time.
He has his face turned and is staring at
the wall. No one is going to save me from this.
Grabbing my stomach, I force my feet to
move. The nurse’s smile is small, but reassuring. My father’s look is full of hate.
An hour later he won’t even look at me.
The test is positive.
At fourteen, my life is over.
***
Ryan
Fuck! This is just what I need.
The bastard had cracked my jaw in two
places, granted they’re hairlines, but that doesn’t mean it doesn’t throb like
a sonofabitch.
It’d been worth it though.
I smirk, even though doing it makes the
pain feel like someone’s shoved a hot poker through my face. I don’t care. It’s
done. Over. Never again.
The doctors gave me pills, sent me home.
Home.
I don’t have one of those anymore.
But I don’t care. I’m more free now than
I’ve ever been. My parents, they’ve never believed me. Just think I’m a big
fucking screw up. I barely graduated high school. There goes Ryan, such a disgrace to his parents. Such good god-fearing
people, what a shame to be saddled with something like that.
I’d heard it all before.
It’d stopped bothering me a long time
ago.
But today I’d had to do it-- had to
confront my uncle, because I’m eighteen and I’m a man and I had to show him
that.
Never again. Not to anybody else. I’d
pounded that truth into his fat face with my bloody fists.
Flexing my fingers I stare at the swollen
and distorted mass of tissue, the sun is beating down on my head. All I have
left in this world is the clothes on my back. I’m not going back home, couldn’t
even if I wanted to.
My dad kicked me out after the fight,
says he can’t handle me anymore. Honestly, I think he would have found a way
anyway, but this fight was the perfect excuse-- a way for him to maintain his
spotless reputation within the community.
All I’ve ever wanted is for him to
fucking believe me. But his chance is over. I’m done and no matter what anybody
else says, I’m not stupid, but with my grades there won’t be any college in my
future.
Glancing down the busy street it takes
me all of two seconds to decide where I’m going.
Away.
Far, far away from Austin, Texas. In
fact, I want out of the country.
I can’t breathe here anymore.
I’m joining the Marines and I’m going to
war.
Happy reading,
~Marie
Come back on Sunday for another 8 sentences!
2 comments:
Marie, this is AWESOME! I am hooked. :-) ! What a great job of drawing in the reader. That last sentence in her part packs such a devastating punch!
One thing? In this sentence in Liliana's part, "Doctors say she’s in the beginning stages of multiple scoliosis, which means dad had to come." --- Is "multiple sclerosis" a better choice?
I can hardly wait to read this one! :-)
Ummm... yes, sheesh, I thought scoliosis sounded wrong. And after countless rounds of edits too!
And I'm glad you like it. :D It was a real labor of love.
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