That is an awesome snippet, Marie! It leaves me wanting to read more. " I finally understand" Oh, the questions those three words pose! Excellent eight. ;-)Any chance that next week, you can link back to wewriwa.com? :-)
Oops, my bad. Totally forgot! Fixed it. And thanks! :D
Echoing Teresa here, there is nothing in those sentences not to like. And I, too, want to know what seemingly insignificant thing it was that Flint did to make him finally understand the truth of those words.
Very emotional snippet. I like how you take a saying we've all heard and make it the heart of such a sad diary entry. It's also a great hook - what has happened to make Flint finally understand?
Yes ~ snappy writing. Good hook. Great eight!
As the others have said; interested to know how Flint came to understand her mother's words. Great hook!
Wow, great journal entry to snag the readers, Marie. I'm not a YA fan, but that grabbed me immediately. Nicely done. :)
Chaos Theory. At least that's where it comes from.
I liked the "voice" of the character and the poignancy that Flint never gets to tell his mother he understands now. Excellent excerpt!
Great place to leave off; I'm wondering what exactly happened that caused him to understand her words.
That's a powerful beginning! I love it!
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